Do you think this sounds like a good start to a story?

Its excellent, i really want to know whats about the envelope and who his boss is.Its catching for a beginning and that's good. I agree with the person b4 me with the sword, either explain it after wards or change it. In my mind all the descriptive stuff doesn't have 2 be added in just yet. He could be looking into his car window or something. I like the mysteriousity. Keep it up, it has potential